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Smut Marathon – Round 1 Musings

Smut Marathon – Round 1 Musings

Firstly, Massive Congratulations to everyone who entered into Round One!

One round into the Smut Marathon and I’m already obsessed. As a writer and reader of many of the participant’s blogs, I have loved, loved, loved every second already. If you don’t know, the first round involved 75 entries of an erotic metaphor. With the stipulation that it was only one sentence and should be no more than 30 words. I was ecstatic (and pretty shocked) to come in at number 11 after the voting round. I wasn’t expecting it at all and I’m still not really sure I deserved it. For anyone who’s curious, this was my entry –

31) Snakes

The strands of his whip were thrashing snakes; lapping at my body as their sweet venom enchanted my flesh.

Looking at it now, the glaringly obvious misuse of the semicolon is staring at me and mocking me. It was also pointed out to me that the first part was perhaps a simile as opposed to a metaphor. This, along with similarly structured entries has since come under debate. Are they similes, or are they metaphors?

I see it as a metaphor, but when looked at deeper, I can appreciate the argument for it being a simile. For instance,

‘The strands of his whip were thrashing snakes, lapping at my body as their sweet venom enchanted my flesh.’

or…

‘He tormented me with his whip; thrashing snakes lapping at my body, as their sweet venom enchanted my flesh.’

Basically, by mentioning both the whips strands and the snakes in such a direct comparison, I arguably turned it into a simile. That being said, browsing online you will find countless metaphor examples structured just like that.

The fact is, outside of a writing competition such as this, it really doesn’t matter which I am using. Though in hindsight, I do prefer the latter example.

It quickly became apparent in the Round 1 results just how much difference a single vote can make to the outcome. So when Round 2 goes live on March 4th, make a difference and have your say! Which will be your favourite 3?

One thing I will be doing differently in the next round of votes is leaving more positive feedback for the ones I loved. Whilst I mentioned how much I enjoyed ‘Landscape’ by Felisha Moon, ‘Unfurled’ by Brigit Delaney and ‘Drowning’ by The Other Livvy, I did whittle those down from 6 standing out favourites. The others being ‘Metamorphosis’ by Sammi, ‘Fluid’ by Floss and ‘Climax’ by Charlton C Tod.

I am very excited for the next round and hope it is better suited to those writers who didn’t feel they could show their full talents on the metaphor assignment. I’ll be honest, I will be completely amazed if I do as well next time. The assignment is something I have never done before. I will give it my all and be extremely grateful if I make it through to round 3!

To see more writers discussing the Smut Marathon, check out the links here! 

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  1. I really love this post, and love how you look differently at your sentence, after the feedback you have received. I could see the scene in front of me when I read your entry.

    I look forward to see what you write for round 2 🙂

    Rebel xox

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