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Smut Marathon Round 3 Musings

Smut Marathon Round 3 Musings

Smut Marathon Round 3 Musings

The results of the third round of the Smut Marathon are now in, and this post is not going to be going at all how I had envisaged it. I was certain, absolutely positive, that my entry would do appallingly. I was just waiting for it all to be over so I could hopefully do a lot better in round 4. But then the feedback was posted and this happened…

I was shocked!

I should probably back up a bit. For those who don’t know, the assignment for the third round was to write (within 200 words) an erotic character sketch, with the stipulation that the character should be imperfect. I immediately panicked. What the hell was a character sketch?!

Thank goodness for Charlton C. Tod of ForbiddenWritings, who came to my rescue and explained what the assignment meant!

This was my entry:


32) Unrecognisable Reflection

The train jolted, an Agent Provocateur bag slipping from her knees and emptying black lace onto the filthy floor.

“Shit!”

Her cheeks turned to the colour of Wendy’s favourite lipstick. The one she fondly remembered scrubbing off her torso that morning. She flicked her eyes from one end of the carriage to the other, no one had bothered glancing up from their phone. Maybe if she put the plunging teddy on and danced the Cha-Cha on her seat they might look up? Probably not. The fluorescent pink strap-on might get their attention though.

Her heart leapt as she caught a glimpse of her unrecognisable reflection, with grey hair speckling black velvet locks. Laughter lines had simply turned to lines, spreading like a spider was weaving a fine web over her skin. Her lips were thinner, but the rest of her had grown; her stomach, her neck, those relentless whiskers she got for her 35th birthday with no receipt.

She much preferred her reflection in the hungry glow of Wendy’s eyes, as the world disappeared in a haze of youthful lust. Just as they had years before, in a damp-ridden studio apartment. She smiled, some things had definitely improved with time.


How I Felt About It

The problem I really had with this round was that I was waiting for inspiration and it never showed up. So, on the day the assignment was due in, I gave up waiting and just wrote what came to me. At 10pm I decided I was too tired to work on it anymore and despite my hatred of it, I sent it in. I was so ashamed of it that if it wasn’t for the fact that I had a place in the marathon that someone else could have had, I probably would have dropped out instead.

I thought my character was boring. That the whole entry was just incredibly dull. And I thought I hadn’t written an actual character sketch.

My Feedback 

“I like how you describe a bit of her personality through her actions (or the actions she thought of doing), as well as give us a clear picture of her face.”

“I really enjoyed this one. Age is an ‘imperfection’ we all have to face eventually, but it doesn’t mean the sexy times have to stop.”

“I think many people recognize themselves in the image you give. You paint a picture of how your body may become less perfect, but the sex becomes better over time. Nice.”

“Expertly done, clever snippets of description which paint a picture of the woman and the kinky lifestyle she enjoys.”

“I liked these lines. It opened with a bit of action, which successfully caught my attention and led me into the story. (Who doesn’t wonder what’s in someone’s bag?) I love the May-December theme, and how the character saw herself through her lover’s eyes. Very nice description of the main character. I liked that the story was inclusive to the LGBTQ community. This was a solid character sketch.”

“I really liked this one but then the ending jarred me a little bit. I totally got that she was an older woman who maybe felt invisible a bit to the world around her but I actually wished it had ended with the word lust because then I would have assumed she was having a sexy relationship with a younger woman whereas this sentence then confused me

Just as they had years before, in a damp-ridden studio apartment. She smiled, some things had definitely improved with time.

“I could visualize this character and there were great details about her physical image as well as in inner motives. Well done!”

“Loved this story. The sentence ”she much preferred her reflection in the hungry glow of Wendy’s eyes” really lifts the whole scene and explains it all. Well written!”

“It’s a great way to write a character sketch, to make use of a reflection; and not only a physical reflection, but also a mental one. Nice!”

I am so grateful to everyone who took the time to leave me feedback. After I had read everyone’s kind words, I didn’t even mind how I ranked. And they meant even more to me as it was so unexpected!

The Results

The overall results of both the jury and public vote put my entry in 8th place. *Excuse me whilst I dance around the room again.* This was really down to the jury vote as I performed very poorly with the public vote. The unexpectedly fantastic result has also increased my overall rank in the marathon, taking me from 22nd to 16th place!

After Round 2 I was certain the next knock out round would be the end for me, but now I’ve got some hope. I’m going to try my hardest for the next assignment (which I love!) and I definitely won’t be leaving it until the last minute this time!

What I’ve Learnt

Most importantly – Don’t leave it until the last day! I do think a few tweaks would have improved it a lot and I often need to give myself a break from a piece of writing in order to see those things.

Due to the requirement of the character being ‘imperfect’, a lot was discussed around disability in erotica. This has been incredibly educational for me and inspired me to be more inclusive in my writing. Marie said we should write, discuss, learn and then try new things. I couldn’t agree more!

Readers will all experience our writing differently, as every reader (even if they seem to have the same disability) is different. For instance, one of the entries was incredibly painful for me. I saw it as a vulnerable person being abused – others saw it as sweet and loving. We all read the same piece of writing, we just saw it differently. The most important thing was that mental health was being included and discussed. Disability, whether physical or mental, affects so many people’s sex lives in some way and that should be represented in erotica.

My Favourite Entries

There were a lot of entries in this round that I really loved, everyone did amazingly! These are the ones I voted for and the ones that made me wish I had more votes!

  • I, Will – Ella Scandal
  • Middle Mike – Nero J. Black
  • One Thing – Charlie Powell
  • Sibling Rivalry – Julie Jones
  • Fortunes Told – May More
  • The Hunter – Exhibit A

Don’t forget to look out for the next round of Smut Marathon entries on April 29th. It’s going to be a seriously hot one! 

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    1. Author

      Thank you, Cara! Well done for your great results too! Your writing was so beautifully erotic and I really appreciate the conversation it induced as it’s been very educational for me.
      Aurora x

  1. Great post Aurora – When we were chatting on twitter I never doubted you would do well. You put your all into your writing, you deserve results. Many thanks for the mention and the comment you left on smut marathon x

    1. Author

      Thank you May! I definitely doubted my entry lol But I’m glad someone had faith in me! Congrats on your results, it really was a beautifully entry.
      Aurora x

  2. As a jury member, I liked your entry. What is often lacking in erotica and what you have done great in this one, is show the feelings of real personas. Erotica is often too shallow, to god damn perfect. Good erotica gets really exciting when personas are real, when they have fears and doubts. Erotica must be grinding and abrasive, not smooth and slick.
    So please keep it up and you will get higher in the ranking!

    1. Author

      Thank you! It is really helpful to know what was liked about that entry. I definitely feel the same when I am reading erotica and will make sure I consider that with my next assignment.
      Aurora x

  3. I am so happy that you have decided to send something in! Sometimes when we doubt ourselves, we can actually surprise ourselves.
    You can always mail me with questions during a round. I cannot help you to write your piece, but I can support in other ways 🙂

    Rebel xox

  4. I loved your piece too. She felt real to me, I could identify with her. I think you are right about not leaving it to the last minute, although actually it shows just what a good writer you are that this fabulous piece if what you produced under pressure and sent in with very little editing.

    Mollyx

  5. I really liked your entry, but struggle with age as an imperfection given that is my reality. Rereading your words now though, resonate with me in a way it is difficult to see when in the middle of so many others. Well done and good luck in round 4.

    I have been fretting over my poor showing in round 3 despite good reviews. So much of your thoughts resonate with me – I didn’t know what an imperfect character sketch would look like either. Thanks for your kind words about my entry.

    1. Author

      I completely understand as the pieces with ‘imperfections’ that were my reality were difficult for me too. I did hope it would come across as an imperfection only in her own eyes though.

      It definitely is difficult to appreciate the entries when there are so many, I agree. I think with each knock out round it will get easier. Good luck with the next round! I’m finding it a lot harder than I thought I would to be honest.
      Aurora x

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